Tag: language

05
Oct

Quotes from the boss should be useful, not just blabber

It is probably rare in companies of any real size that the quotes in a press release, that involve the president or CEO, have actually been uttered by that person.

It is probably almost as rare that the release gets distributed with the quoted person actually having seen what he or she has supposedly said. So these quotes are often innocuous and irrelevant, and therefore not going to get anyone in trouble.

The problem is that these sorts of quotes are just about useless and can actually, in their useless glory,  cast the boss in a bad light. Consider quotes you see all the time that read something like this:

“We’re really excited to be working with Acme DooDads on this project,” says  Brand X CEO Bob Jones.

That sort of thing is suggesting to me that Bob has only the most fleeting awareness of the project, particularly since the  most insightful thing he can come up with is that he’s getting goosebumps.

When you are cooking up a quote from your boss, first of all make it sound like a quote. But more to the point, make it relevant, and something that advances the story. For example: “We know Acme DooDads weighed a lot of options before selecting Brand X,” says Bob Jones, the CEO of Brand X,  “and we’ll be working closely with Acme to ensure we’re helping them hit the business goals we all identified.”

That’s actually making a statement that Brand X came out ahead of a lot of competing companies, and the Brand X is less a vendor and more a partner.

Innocuous nothing quotes, on the other hand, are big red Stop signs that tell a reader, “OK, we’re done with the interesting stuff and we’re into the Blah Blah Blah. Time to move on.”

28
Sep

Fine-tuning your message so that prospective customers notice, and care

This post was also recently posted on the Website of the Digital Signage Association ...

How digital signage and digital out of home companies craft their communications on their Websites, handouts and in press releases is critical to their success.

So why is so much of it so bad?

The industry executives I speak with almost uniformly admit they know they could and should do better, but don’t have the time or resources. Coming from technology, ad sales and retail backgrounds, they also haven’t the insight or experience to recognize the good from the bad.

In the interest of helping better shape the message, here are a few tips:

Figure out what makes your company unique, and go hard with it

For whatever reason this is a “me, too” business, with most vendors marketing themselves on the same general range of features and capabilities that their competitors are also trumpeting. It’s hard to stand out from the pack if all you have to half-heartedly report is the written equivalent of, “Yeah, ummm, we do that stuff, too.”

There will be something your firm has developed, or work your team has done with a client, that is at least uncommon and worthy of a little marketing noise. Maybe your company had to figure out a solution that involved GPS and mass transit? That experience and capability is far more intriguing than telling the world your platform does all that stuff everybody else does, too.

Get to the point

Anyone who has been involved in this sector for a while knows how important it is to have good programming that quickly captures the attention of viewers. The same thing applies with a company’s written communications. Between emails, RSS feeds, tweets and texts, people are carpet-bombed all day with marketing messages. That means your message better make its point quickly, or it will be passed by.

Empty phrases that clutter the opening lines of announcements need to be dropped. The point of your communication can’t be buried somewhere in the third paragraph of your e-mailer. You can’t write something that people need to read twice just to figure out, because they won’t .

Put your key messages in context

When you are banging out your key features and benefits messages, and announcements about new gadgets and gizmos, make sure you do the extra work to explain what that means for your prospective customers.

When your company celebrates the release of a new energy efficient combination of PC and display panel in an all-in-one package, don’t stop there. It’s better described as a technology combination capable of dropping energy consumption for a signage deployment by as much as 25%.

Adding 250 more screens and locations doesn’t mean your ad network is now in 600 locations in five states. The message for prospective advertisers, the ones you’re after, is that the addition of 250 sites means your highly-targeted digital out of home media network is now reaching 200,000 affluent consumers every week.

Think through the whole communications chain

How many times have you read a press release, or the news story that spilled out of it, that was effective enough to send you to the company Website to find out more, only to find there was no “more” to be found?

Marketing and media communications have to be carried through the whole chain. If there’s an announcement, it needs to already be up on the Website and easy to find. The sales people need to be briefed on what it is about so that they can respond knowledgeably and not feel like doofuses. They also need material, ready to go, they can send out as follow-ups to calls, and it shouldn’t be just the same thing the prospects just read.

Meanwhile, existing clients need and expect to get early word of new goodies from their vendor, and to first learn of it on some blog.

Choose your words with care

There are powerful phrases, and there are empty phrases. Good writers choose their words carefully, and think about things like the rhythm and emotion of the message. Most of the people writing copy for Websites, email updates and press releases are doing so not because they like writing, but because they have to … so even if takes forever to prepare, those people spend little time actually thinking about the message.

That’s how the industry has ended up with a vast sea of empty phrases and buzzwords about leading, turnkey solutions and revolutionary, state of the art development. If someone only has to write copy every now and then, there’s a natural tendency to look around and borrow on what other companies are doing. They read three press releases starting off with “leading provider” and figure they better get that in there, too. They see Websites that talk “turnkey” and figure that needs to get in there. The result, every day and everywhere, is yet more of the same blabber.

Whether it’s Website copy, email blasts or press releases, whoever gets charged with doing the writing should ignore what else is out there, forget they ever read phrases like “best of breed” and “taken to the next level”, and think through the messages that would actually resonate with prospective customers and partners.

It’s an after-thought for a lot of companies, but developing the right message that helps drive product awareness, build credibility and boost sales needs the same attention to detail as product and market development. You can have a kickass product, a fabulous network footprint, or do amazing creative, but if you do a bad job of getting the word out, few people will know.

21
Sep

How to write a digital signage press release: Step 4 – Body copy

The headline and the summary and leading paragraphs have hopefully done their jobs of drawing people into your news release. Now it’s time to fully explain what you are up to, why people should care, and get into the nitty-gritty of how or what’s being done.

You want to be sure the five W questions are covered off – who, what, when, where and why – as well as any other Ws that matter, like which.

This is your chance to provide accurate detail on the project or product, and when you can make statements about the impact. Those statements are things like driving sales lift, enhancing navigation, making a task easier, allowing people to work in their native language, any number of potential benefits.

The body copy is where you can also go into more detail about your company and market position, and use one or two tight quotes from the appropriate representative for the company. The person quoted should be someone who, if pressed, could actually speak with some degree of knowledge about the project, product or service.

This is not critical, but I really like quotes that read naturally, like they really are quotes. Almost all quotes in press releases are planted words, and most of them read that way. You can dilute the credibility of a message if people reading it are marveling at how stilted the quote is instead of taking in what it says. If you are creating a quote, just read it back and ask yourself if it sounds even remotely natural. If not, that’s easily tweaked.

Keep it tight. Your press release is ideally only seven or eight paragraphs in length. You will start losing readers if you go much longer. If there is a lot of technical detail to go through, consider attachments or a Web link where the propellerheads can go to get a jargon fix.

Paragraphs should be reasonably uniform in size and sentences should not run on and on. Have a look at newspaper articles to get some sense of how information is broken up. If you write overly long paragraphs, they look like intimidating walls of characters that people don’t even want to start on.

Some fundamentals:

  • be honest and accurate
  • you are selling your company and goods though useful information, not hype and lots of exclamation points
  • if there are other parties mentioned in the release, ensure they approve what is written and asserted
  • it should read easily all the way through

Next – Step 5 – footer and contact information

16
Sep

How to write a digital signage press release: Step 1 – Define your objective

I spend a lot of time with this blog slapping around companies that do a truly terrible job of media communications, and by pointing out the mistakes, trying to educate them and others.

But I don’t want to dwell on the negative stuff, and thought it might be useful to put readers through the basics of writing a press release to distribute in this industry.

This is not done through the lens of someone who took formal public relations training and has some certification to that effect. My background is daily newspaper journalism, as down and dirty as investigative reporting, and I have been reading press releases for 30 years because I had to. There may well be a formula that’s been laid out in textbooks, but here’s what I think actually works in getting the attention of editors and bloggers, and readers who get things direct through news readers and filters.

I’m going to break this up in parts, so that the post is not too long and I can drill a little deeper into the process and then the components.

The very first thing you need to sort out is why you are doing a press release.

What has happened, or will happen, that compels your company to issue information about it? Is what you are about to tell the world actually interesting or valuable to anyone beyond the walls of your company? Or are you issuing a press release because, as is common, it’s been a while and you want to keep the company name out there?

For example, a press release about your company’s new Website is only relevant if the facelift changes the way your clients do business with you. If it’s the online equivalent of a new hairdo, forget it. Changing office locations isn’t PR-worthy, unless you are hiring a bunch of people or adding new facilities like a lab or hosting center.

New product developments that advance the company or the industry, or big deals, milestones or hires, that’s cause for press. If your company trades on an exchange, you may be legally required to issue press releases on any business dealings or status changes.

The point here: if you have nothing, really, to announce … or don’t have to be law … just don’t do a press release.

If you do, develop an angle for your story to make it more compelling. Announcing your advertising network has added some new venues is nice, but not overly compelling. Announcing that a new set of venues added this month to the WhizBang Media Network means ads are now being delivered to a weekly audience of more than 250,000 affluent, gourmet food-loving consumers is another matter entirely. That’s reminding your target advertisers you just got to a big number and might get you to whatever it is that constitutes critical mass.

Think about what you want and need to announce, and how you’ll spin it to make it interesting to your target readers.

Keep in mind spin is one view of the facts, but is still, hopefully, maintaining some grip on reality.  You should be able to defend your spin, so if your angle is that your service is the first of its kind, is it? Can you defend assertions that what you’re doing is the best? Is what’s going out some largely empty and indefensible chest-beating exercise (common), or something people will read and send to friends because it looks like what your company is doing is something they and others will want to know about.

If it’s just hype, most people see through it. People don’t like being “sold” in press releases. They expect worthwhile information. Press releases are an opportunity to talk about good work you’re doing, and the successes  you’ve had or are coming. You want people to read what you’re doing and conclude they either need to know more, or have reinforced that these guys are busy and clearly making a mark. Press releases can show market momentum and corporate excellence.

But bad press releases can have all the wrong effects. If they are written poorly that reflects on the company’s smarts and ability to communicate. If the releases are nothing but empty phrases and unsubstantiated assertions wrapped around a small hint of news, your company is telling people you’re really not up to much. And companies that announce relentlessly, with near constant releases about pretty much anything, can create reader fatigue – the equivalent of hearing someone drone on and on and wishing they’d please just stop.

The audience for press releases has changed dramatically in the last decade. For scores of years, press releases were only ever seen by journalists, since they were distributed in one way or another only to media outlets. Releases were written entirely for the editors, with the expectation that if a press release was noticed and picked up, it would be seriously filtered, with the BS removed and the story recast from the perspective of the assigned journalist.

The Internet means press releases go everywhere, immediately, and there are now several target recipients.  Mainstream journalists may see  a release and pursue a full story, but the more common scenario now is for releases to get noticed and largely repurposed by online industry publications, and sector bloggers. Some of these writers get their hands dirty and filter and repackage stories, or even take the releases in unintended directions. But most just pass the releases though largely unfiltered, the contents re-formatted more than edited.

That means the plan and the wording of the release you put together is that much more important, because while it may pass through other hands, it can easily go through pretty much untouched. It will be rare when a journalist comes back to you and asks what you were trying to go on about in the release. You won’t find out it’s really bad until someone reads it and tells you. Someone like your now unhappy CEO.

NEXT – Step 2 – Headlines

11
Sep

Everything not make doing with press release

As stated in the past, my multilingual skills extend only to being able to say Hello and order beer. So I comment on material that is language-challenged with that in mind.

But, I am smart enough to know that if I am going to send out a release in a second language, I need to get it checked by someone who is proficient in the first language.

This has nothing to do with our sector, but it is both sad and hysterically funny. It makes you wonder if Borat has left journalism and started a public relations firm in Kyrgyzstan.

The point here: don’t do this … (company name excised)

Grand Opening of X.O. Casino

On September 3rd there was the grand opening of X.O. Casino in Bishkek (Kirgizia)

Press release September 4th, 2009

The international group (guys who wrote this)  is happy to announce the opening of X.O Casino in Bishkek. The facility is located in Hyatt Hotel, and it promises to become the most fashionable one in the city. This is a chamber casino of X.O. format which has shown itself to good advantage in other projects of the company, aiming at high-rollers, well-to-do guests of the capital city. Classical games will be offered here on 12 tables featuring Russian Poker, Punto Banco, Black Jack, and Roulette as well as 30 of the newest slot machines including many Gaminator’s.

The facility is designed in the luxurious “art deco” style. Mirror ceilings visually extend the space and exquisite stained glass fills the casino floors with warm light. Furniture and bandings of walls clad with expensive fabric are made of finewood. Luxury, sophisticated taste and comfort – this is what (the company’s) experts have been targeting at, creating the interior of X.O.-Bishkek Casino.

The tradition of organizing big events devoted to our new properties was continued by the bright night of the grand opening of X.O. casino in Bishkek. All the beau-monde of the capital city gathered outdoors, next to the swimming pool in Hyatt Hotel, where the new casino is located. Sadly, not everyone willing could be a guest at the event as the number of invitations and tickets had been limited.

From the very start the exciting performance by Artecc – a young but professional band which has already won the love of the local public – gave a positive tune to the party. Further on Prestige, a fire and magic show, made the audience recall the times when the nature elements and the unknown used to be much closer. And everyone seemed to have forgotten about the fun of the fair – A-Studio band’s performance.

There is nothing to hide – it was A-Studio that had caused the frenzy about the event. They are fellow countrymen here, the ones able to set the whole post-Soviet space in turmoil. They are loved here, and waited for, and it was obvious from the smiles, happiness and dances that the audience was sincerely grateful for the opportunity to enjoy the music by their favourite performes on that warm autumn night.

Closing the party, accompanied by the thunder of endless fireworks, (the CEO) made a joke: “This is the most memorable event since the times of Genghis Khan!”

A lot of people noted the high level of the event organization – and this is what should be expected if the party is devoted to an opening of an elite facility.

04
Sep

DS PR 101: It's what's new, not just that it's new

A common lead paragraph on press releases I see all the time …

Brand X, leading innovators of IPTV, Digital Signage and VoD Software, will be exhibiting at BIG SHOW in BIG CITY sometime soon. New versions of Brand X’s Digital Signage solution will be unveiled at the show and demonstrated at the booth, located at a number and location no one will remember.

If you are announcing you have a new product and you will be showing off that new product at your booth that you are spending a freaking fortune to put up and staff, give a little thought to telling people in your press release why they may actually care.

The fact that you have something new will not send people your way. You need to tell them what’s new, as in “A sophisticated new user interface and an industry-first ad approvals system are among the enhancements to the latest version of Brand X’s digital signage software, WhizBang, that will be debuted at the upcoming BIG SHOW in …

It’s the difference between an “Uh-huh …” reaction and an “Oh, really?” reaction.

By all means tell people you will be there, and exactly where, but first give them a reason to come by and you may get emails and calls wanting to book times right at the booth, which beats the hit and miss business of strong prospects coming by when you are too busy to talk and moving on, both physically and mentally.

31
Aug

When good lines get overused …

Maybe three years ago, give or take a bit, the company I was with then was wrestling with a good tag line to use for its products and services. Ultimately they went with something that made me cross-eyed and therefore even funnier looking than  normal, and decided against the other option that I liked: “Right message. Right Place. Right time.”

Sound familiar? Sure it does. Because several companies use variations of it as one of their key messaging points. I just saw it used again today by a software company, and this was after seeing it in a couple of new places last week.

This is not a tired or meaningless buzz phrase like all those ones we’re advocating to see banished. I actually think it’s pretty good in explaning what well designed software can do for clients. It’s just that a lot of people now use it.

Is that a bad thing? Not as part of the narrative of marketing materials or press releases, because that simple message beats the hell out of blabbering away about “business rules-based message targeting” and the glories of meta data.

I just wouldn’t lead with it or put it in bold on marketing materials. Intended or not, the Right Message thing is going to read like Borrowed Message.

27
Aug

DS PR 101: Get someone you trust for an honest answer to read back your prose. It might have stopped this …

seriously confusedFrom a press release on the wires this morning, as flagged by a fellow industry writer …

(Brand X) announced the growing network of digital signage’s marking developments in the space highlighting 5 key trends evolving in the digital signage space. With the promise of being one of the most exciting platforms, the trends broadly include content emphasis; importance of old media and cross platform integration, interactive screen motivation and affordable technology. Earlier, in July 2009, the company’s digital signage clientele included (an  institution) with the launch of (a third-party’s) digital signage software replacing a standalone solution. This allows multiple users to be able to alter content, drag and drop functionality and an intuitive interface – unique to the digital signage industry.

Oh, where to start …

How about, “What? Huh? Ummm ….”

The first, forehead-slappingly obvious rule in issuing press releases is that they should make sense. I don’t know what this opening paragraph means, other than the guys are using a particular software plattform and they installed at a college. The rest, beats me.

I had an email from a company in Europe this morning looking for help. Bluntly, the contact told me he and his colleagues suck at PR. But they recognized that, and are doing something about it. I suck at plumbing, so I hire guys instead of drowning my family.

At an elemental level, if you have the presence of mind to wonder if what you are writing might not be all that good, ask a friend or colleague who will give you a straight answer to read your PR. Had that happened here, this press release probably doesn’t go out.

25
Aug

Has the term broadcast quality reached its expiry date?

I had a marketing email blast sent to me by one of the industry portals today, the vendor going with the line: “Broadcast-quality digital signage: Why Settle for Less?”

I perceive something tagged as broadcast-quality to be of high quality, and not some shaky, grainy piece of crap video that might come off an old camcorder. The guys issuing the piece definitely have a product that delivers high-quality motion graphics, as it is their whole background. So they are in no way stretching the truth.

But as I was reading  the piece, I was immediately thinking “broadcast-quality” is a fairly empty assertion.

With the exception of some little flash card-driven sneakernet appliances that can only do standard definition video, just about any PC or even media appliance will push out 720P or higher video and motion graphics that are probably better than the supposed HD signals we pay for from our cablecos. I have definitely seen some platforms that push crappy signals, but the vast majority of solutions out there will push out a broadcast-quality signal.

It’s certainly not wrong to celebrate the high quality of your product, but it’s hardly a unique selling point. I’m thinking “broadcast-quality” is one of those heavily traded phrases that has reached or is getting really close to its expiry date.

24
Aug

BuzzPhrase Alert: Cloud computing

I just had my first sighting of what I think will be one of those buzz phrases that will get liberally lobbed into PR and marketing material in the weeks and months to come. It was used this morning in the loopy assertion that a central download portal for public service videos was “essentially delivering ‘cloud computing’ for PSAs.”

Well, no.

Cloud computing is mostly known as managed server farms set up under a business and operating model that allows IT people to  increase capacity or add new capabilities pretty much on the fly, without buying iron (servers) or new software, and without adding bodies. The many companies in the DS space who do Software as a Service kinda, sorta do cloud computing, but only kinda, sorta. The SaaS comapnies tend to more be the customers of heavy-duty IT hosting companies that do the work, like Rackspace and ThinkGrid.

The propeller-heads can argue what the real pure definition of cloud computing is, but it is definitely not about simple tasks such as putting up some files in a central spot so people can download them.

Some gentle advice: don’t just throw buzz phrases in to your pitch because they are popular. They should also be appropriate, and your company will come off better if it appears you might actually know what you are going on about.